can you grade my expository essay and tell me what to change if needed..

Answer:

A-

Explanation:

Introduction:

Avoid using second person in your hook. You can rephrase this by saying:

"Observing someone's speech and behavior gives insight on their personality."

Watch your capitalization! You need to capitalize proper nouns (Nelson Mandela).

You need to put a comma, not a period, before "that is why"

You can improve your thesis. Remove much...your thesis can stand without it. Remove the "that is why" and go straight to "I think."

I like the flow! You have established your ideas, but you need to also map out what I should expect in your body paragraphs. You can do this by introducing each one in one or two sentences between the hook and thesis.

2nd Paragraph:

Tighten your sentences! "All over the world" can be changed to worldwide.

Repetitive. "Iconic" and "icon" in the same sentence? Find a synonym for one of those words and replace it.

Put 'as' before "the son of a tribal leader." (I'm not sure if the same sentence is a run-on. From what I understand it's the tribal leader who achieved these feats?)

"He joined"; The person who takes on this pronoun. Change it to the proper noun of the person you are referring to.

3rd Paragraph:

Find a way to shorten your first sentence!

"...he stepped up the fight"

1) Change he to Mandela

2) Stepped up sounds a bit colloquial(informal)..change it!

Change "aims" to "goals"

Conclusion:

Again, avoid using second person (unless your teacher specifically asked for it)!

We can rephrase the first sentence:

"Contributing to positive change in society is admirable in the sense that actions are more powerful than words."

Use the same formula w/ the other sentences that involve first person. (You could also easily change it to 'a person', etc)

Concluding sentence: "Every person has the capability to make a positive difference in their life and in society regardless of age or experience. The proper act to take is performing on one's own volition by pursuing one's dreams and passions."

This is a change you can make to it.

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Read the excerpt from Act II, scene vi of Romeo and Juliet. Friar Laurence: These violent delights have violent ends, And in their triumph die, like fire and powder, Which, as they kiss consume: the sweetest honey Is loathsome in his own deliciousness And in the taste confounds the appetite: Therefore love moderately; long love doth so; Too swift arrives as tardy as too slow. What mood is created by the oxymoron and paradox in this excerpt

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Discuss how commas affect reading fluency.

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The sentence below is an example of a
Carrying an umbrella, the dog walked beside his master.

Actually, things will be as man will have decided they are to be. Does that mean that I should abandon myself to quietism? (“Existentialism,” p. 1174)

Based on its use in this context, the word quietism most likely means _

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write about the work you want to do in future​

If you were interviewing an expert on women in the military about Deborah Sampson's experience in the army, which question would be MOST relevant ?

Once upon a time, I met you.

I fell in "love", You left

I'm broken, The end.

The man said, " Is Mrs. Gupta in her office? change into indirect speech​

What does Jonas encounter on his journey
that he has never seen before?

Lady Macbeth assists her husband in covering up the murder of King Duncan by burying the dagger.

True
False

Which of the following elements are used in oratory to create an emotional appeal?

body language
tone of voice
patterns of speech
neutral language

The British historical time known as the _____ was when playwrights could diversify their subject matter.


Elizabethan era


Middle English period


Jacobean age


Caroline age

2) Choose the best answer.

Two new drama genres that emerged from 1558–1603 were _____.


satyrs and pantomime


tragedy and comedy


mystery and morality plays


tragicomedy and romance

3) Choose the best answer.

During the reign of Queen Elizabeth, _____ mainly played the parts of women.


playwrights


rulers


men


children

4) Choose the best answer.

A dramatic convention when a character overhears important information about the plot and informs the audience is called _____.


eavesdropping


soliloquy


chorus


aside

5) Choose the best answer.

A dramatic convention whereby one character speaks to the audience (on the side) to reveal important information that other characters do not know is called _____.


a mask


eavesdropping


an aside


a soliloquy

6) Choose the best answer.

A dramatic convention of a character making a speech expressing inner thoughts but not speaking to other characters onstage is called ______.


a soliloquy


eavesdropping


a mask


an aside

7) Choose the best answer.

Playwrights in the Elizabethan era often alluded to classical mythology as well as _______.


Christian texts


Hinduism


Muslim tenets


Chinese proverbs

8) Choose the best answer.

How does an aside, eavesdropping, or the use of a soliloquy cause dramatic irony?


Events do not turn out how the audience believes they will.


The audience finds out that the character speaking to the audience is tricking them.


The audience becomes more informed than some characters in the play.


These are the times when the audience answers the character’s questions to them.

9) Choose the best answer.

Elizabethan playwrights make allusions. An allusion is _____.


borrowing ideas from well-known works


using magical tricks to entertain the audiences


plagiarizing words from other authors’ plays


making humorous jokes about tragic circumstances

10) Choose the best answer.

Minerva is the Roman goddess of ______.


wisdom


love


revenge


fertility

11) Choose the best answer.

Hercules is the half-god, half-______ superhero in Greek mythology.


calf
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wolf


human


giant

12) Choose the best answer.

In the historical play Richard II by Shakespeare, what place is both called the seat of Mars (in Roman mythology) and also Eden (the Biblical name for the center of creation)?


Heaven


Great Britain


Ireland


Denmark

13) Choose the best answer.

In Shakespeare’s tragedy Othello, Iago speaks to the audience in a(n) _____, telling the audience of his motivations and plans to ruin Othello’s marriage.


soliloquy


dream


allusion


secret meeting

14) Choose the best answer.

Iago has suspicions about Othello and his _____, which is one of the reasons he wants to ruin Othello.


sister


daughter


wife


lieutenant

Use Treachery in a sentence.

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Explain the climax in the story plot line of "Thank You, Ma'am." The climax in the story, "Thank you, Ma'am,” happens when Mrs. Jones admits that she has also made mistakes she regrets. She says, , Because of this, In summary:​

Why do you think Shaka has been able to stay out of prison?

The revising stage of the editing process includes:
A. drafting.
B. editing, feedback, and making final changes.
C. brainstorming and outlining.
D. verbs.

Read the excerpt from "Healthy Eating."


If anything gets in the way of our good eating, it's lifestyle. When you get home from work late, why spend an hour in front of the stove when you can spend two minutes at the microwave? And doesn't that oatmeal box claim to be a good source of calcium for our kids, never mind the small print listing 14 grams of sugar? A small soda at the movies could satisfy a family of four. Even schools have vending machines.


What does the author think is responsible for people's poor eating habits?


A) They do not know how to correctly read the nutrition information on food packages.

B) They do not know how to prepare healthy meals that are both inexpensive and quick.

C) They often choose foods that are quick and convenient instead of ones that are healthy.

D) They spend time thinking about work and entertainment instead of thinking about food.
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Write an Extended response using evidence and information from you chart, explain how people and animals make sounds
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what are some of the possible outcomes of

transformation of human into cyborg?​

Your financial institution can't help you if there is a mistake on your bank account statement.

Think about the following question: If you were stranded on a desert island for a month,what five things would you want to have with you

Write an essay explaining why these things are important
Your essay must be at least 20 lines long

Match each phase of English with the language it was most influenced by.

Middle English

French influence

Old English

Latin and Greek influence

Modern English

German influence

Intro

Done

Light travels fast and in a _______________.
A.wavy line
B.blue line
C.compression wave
D.straight line

Examine the theme statement and select the quote that best supports the statement.

Nestor suggests Achilles respect the hierarchy of the crown.

"Do you, young warriors, hear my age advise"
"when Nestor spoke, they listen'd and obey'd"
"let kings be just, and sovereign power preside"
"To Troy's proud monarch, and the friends of Troy!"

This question is about the Iliad By Homer